expository essay
The intro establishes context and purpose and also has some really nice themes, but some of the phrasing is cumbersome. Like the opening line, for example, feels disjointed (the two clauses aren’t synched up). Also, don’t use labels to separate sections of your essay, instead use transitions and a topic sentence to clearly articulate the main idea of each section.
I like how you explore structure in the first section, but you also a bit vague. Explore how the day is more routine in HS (go class to class, less flexibility in scheduling), whereas college is more diverse (long breaks between classes, more choice in class/teacher, etc). Implies some of this, but don’t state this precisely enough or in enough detail.
Is there more lecture, less group work in college vs HS?
Explore the “grading” idea in more detail. In both settings aren’t students evaluation based on knowledge of the material? Explore and explain in more detail what, exactly, you see as the difference in which student are evaluated. This is interesting and has a lot of potential, but it’s a bit imprecise at this time.
Overall , as I indicated before, there is a nice foundation here in your essay shows a lot of potential come but you are a little too vague into imprecise in places; more detail and further exploration of some of these ideas would make for a stronger overall comparison.
